My third grade daughter wrote this story in her spare time across the last two days. She tells me it is not yet done and is very proud of it although she knows there are many mistakes in it. The school until recently has told me that she does not need SLP Eval. They also tell me that her problem is reading comprehension and have put her in small group reading with a tutor.
“One day a squaril [squirrel] was wondering for peanuts in a girl’s backyard. Then it bit all the wier [wire] to the back doors it lunged in the house and climed [climbed] on all of the cabince [cabinets]. After that the squaril was smelling for some food it bit the cabince [cabinets] and bit a jar. The jar had peanutbutter in side of it then stole the peanutbutter ate it and got the food on all of the paws. The squaril [squirrel] was walking away and tracking foot prints [footprints] with peanutbutter on the floor and didn’t know it, and lunged out of the house sunddly [suddenly] it climed [climbed] on a tree. The girl walked into her house put her things on the table in the same room that the squaril [squirrel] made footprints. She saw the footprints she followed them and saw the bitten screen. Then the girl saw footprint in the snow and she lost the footprints. So she whened [went] back in the house and at [ate] supper, then she cleaned the mess up. After that went to sleep. She woke up went down the hall opened and closed the door waked [walked] back up the hall and stayed there. Also she was peeking, the squaril [squirrel] came in the house, she made some noise be axadint [accident]. The squaril [squirrel] ran away for now. Then she went to work. The squaril [squirrel] came back made sure that no one was there then went to the peanutbutter, and this time the squaril [squirrel] cecked [checked] to see if any one was there. ”
Thank you for your help in advance.
lovely story!
I’d like to see her handwriting and what her paper looks like but this is a very nice story! It held my attention and was very creative. Her spelling is not creative - she makes fairly consistent mistakes and the same kind of spelling mistakes that many children her age make.
Based on this story alone, I wouldn’t be able to ascertain that your daughter had any learning differences. Did your daughter write this story because she wanted to or was it an assignment given to her? Knowing how much time and stress went into the story would also be helpful to know. If she dashed this off great. If though a story of this length took hours and hours and many many tears, that can mean something other than great.
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She did this of her own accord. She was watching the squirrels out in the yard and decided she would write this story, which she tells me is not finished yet. I think it is a wonderful story and does keep your attention. She started this on a Saturday morning and worked on it periodically through Saturday and Sunday. This is as far as she has gotten. There were no tears, but she did spend many, many hours writing what she has. If this had been a homework assignment, there would have been many tears and a lot of frustration. She finds it difficult to organize her thoughts in her mind and then get them to paper. Her handwriting is age appropriate—stays on the lines, words are properly spaced, and legible.
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:lol: Sounds like a great story. My son who is 12 (LD written expression)could never had composed this.He misspells much more than she does. I don’t think she has a PROBLEM.Please encourage her to continue her writing and don’t look at the spelling mistakes. The creative juices are flowing and that is the important thing!! Tell her we loved her story! Jan
Great Story
I would fully agree with the other posters. My dd would never have been able to create this story in 3rd grade, even though she loves to generate stories. At that point in time she was often “writing in code”, and certainly would never have been able to generate the details with words that your daughter has accomplished. She is still struggling with remembering to put correct spacing in her sentences, and to keep her letters of consistent height. This story was creative, have sense of time, and detail of character. It is well done.
Thanks for good advice, below